Before I can accept your app there's a little more that needs doing. To help I have listed a few questions- don't feel like you need to answer all of them exactly as listed, but hopefully they can serve as a guideline.
Personality
I would like to see a much more robust personality section. Currently I am not getting much sense of what sort of person she is at all. How does her sass and temperamental personality show? Does she act differently with those she is protective over? How does she approach problems? Does she show all her feelings? Is the sass a shield for the things she doesn't want others to see? How does she feel about the things that have happened to her? How does she see herself? You have themes as trust, betrayal and persecution. How do those inform her personality? How does her upbringing affect the way she gets through and sees the world?
If you have any questions or want to discuss anything with me feel free to contact me for a chat (damua on plurk, damua#1089 on discord). Please submit your revisions by the 29th May 6am GMT.
Revisions
Before I can accept your app there's a little more that needs doing. To help I have listed a few questions- don't feel like you need to answer all of them exactly as listed, but hopefully they can serve as a guideline.
Personality
I would like to see a much more robust personality section. Currently I am not getting much sense of what sort of person she is at all. How does her sass and temperamental personality show? Does she act differently with those she is protective over? How does she approach problems? Does she show all her feelings? Is the sass a shield for the things she doesn't want others to see? How does she feel about the things that have happened to her? How does she see herself? You have themes as trust, betrayal and persecution. How do those inform her personality? How does her upbringing affect the way she gets through and sees the world?
If you have any questions or want to discuss anything with me feel free to contact me for a chat (damua on plurk, damua#1089 on discord). Please submit your revisions by the 29th May 6am GMT.