Before I can accept your app there's a little more that needs doing.
Personality
I would like a bit more in her personality section, to get a better idea of the character. To help I have listed a few questions- don't feel like you need to answer all of them exactly as listed, but hopefully they can serve as a guideline for a more in depth personality section.
What drives her conflicts? How does she feel about having to be a 'perfect robot' for her family and has that changed in the time she's lived with her grandma?
The history mentioned that she prayed for her father to die and condemn him to hell- does she still hold guilt about that? Does she blame herself or others?
How does she feel about her grandma? How does she feel about escape?
You mention rage, how does that manifest? What sets it off? Is she always angry? How does she tend to react/interact with people outside her family? Does she hide the anger or is she generally brash/rude etc?
Is finding Tristan something she wants to do? Or does she consider him lost for good? How does fighting make her feel? Is it something she is proud of? Does it help the anger or make it worse?
Does she feel she is keeping her promise to her father of being 'one of the good guys'? Why? Why not? How does she feel about that?
What are her general opinions on religion? How has being brought up by her father and then her grandma and their different extremes shaped her worldview?
If you have any questions or want to discuss anything with me feel free to contact me for a chat (damua on plurk, damua#1089 on discord). Please submit your revisions by the 30th July so we can get you all processed before the IC intro!
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Before I can accept your app there's a little more that needs doing.
Personality
I would like a bit more in her personality section, to get a better idea of the character. To help I have listed a few questions- don't feel like you need to answer all of them exactly as listed, but hopefully they can serve as a guideline for a more in depth personality section.
What drives her conflicts? How does she feel about having to be a 'perfect robot' for her family and has that changed in the time she's lived with her grandma?
The history mentioned that she prayed for her father to die and condemn him to hell- does she still hold guilt about that? Does she blame herself or others?
How does she feel about her grandma? How does she feel about escape?
You mention rage, how does that manifest? What sets it off? Is she always angry? How does she tend to react/interact with people outside her family? Does she hide the anger or is she generally brash/rude etc?
Is finding Tristan something she wants to do? Or does she consider him lost for good? How does fighting make her feel? Is it something she is proud of? Does it help the anger or make it worse?
Does she feel she is keeping her promise to her father of being 'one of the good guys'? Why? Why not? How does she feel about that?
What are her general opinions on religion? How has being brought up by her father and then her grandma and their different extremes shaped her worldview?
If you have any questions or want to discuss anything with me feel free to contact me for a chat (damua on plurk, damua#1089 on discord). Please submit your revisions by the 30th July so we can get you all processed before the IC intro!
Good luck!